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And so it begins. While I have enjoyed writing all of my life, I started taking it more seriously years ago. And, like any idiot, I started by trying to write a book. The story was good, but after a … Continue reading
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And so it begins. While I have enjoyed writing all of my life, I started taking it more seriously years ago. And, like any idiot, I started by trying to write a book. The story was good, but after a … Continue reading
I can’t recommend this book. I went into it with high hopes. The author has quite a few books under his belt, and this title came with good reviews. I’m very fond of apocalyptic tales and I was looking forward to the read.
What I liked about the book: Writing style is good. Very engaging. It could use another trip to an editor due to a few typos and grammar oddities, but nothing that can’t be overlooked if one is enjoying the story.
What I did not like about this book: There were too many things in the plot that did not make logical sense. I will try to explain this without wanton spoilers, but I will speak of some plot points, so stop reading if this concerns you.
*********A few spoilers**************
The plot is a basic zombie story without enough differences to make it stand out in a crowd. The plot itself is full of things that are nonsensical. For example, early on, the zombie of a small girl in pigtails manages somehow to attach herself to the windshield of a bus. It remains unclear in the narrative how she reached it or what she clung to. She also manages to completely block the drivers sight, despite being only one small girl. Then she beats at the window until cracks appear throughout the glass. Despite this damage to the windshield, rather than breaking, it pops out as a complete piece, manages to turn itself in mid air to avoid the driver, and lands harmlessly in the aisle. In the author’s mind, perhaps this made sense, but he was not able to convey this with any believability. I almost put the book down at this point, but reviewers said that it picked up past the 1/3 mark, so I stuck with it.
Another example of convenient but unbelievable plot device. The folks are holed up in a restaurant. There’s lots of food in the freezer, but the power is already out, and the generator will only last two days. Weeks later, and they are still eating hamburger from the freezer. It’s at least six weeks. There is talk amongst the characters of finding diesel fuel to put in the generator, but it isn’t shown to happen. The characters are using candles and such and talking about the lack of power throughout the story. If the idea was that they refueled the generator only for the freezer, this is not made clear at all. It read as if they were eating rotten crap, and after weeks, it would be disgusting. But the characters don’t describe it that way, only that they are tired of hamburger.
Those are only two examples of many. Character decisions and the laws of probability and physics seemed to be for no better reason than to further the author’s plot. This is a broken world, where tiny zombies can fly, unrefrigerated meat lasts for six weeks, Glass with a million cracks doesn’t break, and men who fall hundreds of feet can survive to add conflict. What bothered me most was that the author could have justified all of these choices by taking the time to explain them, or by making more believable choices in the first place. If this author can get his plot to the level of his writing style, then I would enjoy his tales, instead of feeling cheated by them.
Tomorrow starts the opening day of Camp NaNoWriMo. Some of you know that NaNoWriMo is a site and group dedicated to National Novel Writing Month. What you might not know is that they do a version of this in July instead of November. I’ve never participated in any of the events, but since I don’t start the new job until August, I thought this would be an excellent way to try to get book four finished by that time.
Today I found out than I’m a rebel, but that’s ok, because rebels are not only tolerated but encouraged. Rebel writers are writers that are working on a project that they started before the first day of the event. I started book four on the 21st of June, and I’ve written 16k words so far. I won’t count those words in my Camp goal, but I have indeed started my project early. I couldn’t wait, the plot bunny was too hilarious to be put off.
Camp is less structured than the November event. Writers can pick their own word count goal, instead of the regular 50k words. Some of my cabin mates have goals of 20k or less. Me, I’m a masochist. My goal is 60k words to be written during Camp. My 16k that had already been written doesn’t count.
Campers can also choose a goal other than novel writing, for example, editing a previously written book, or writing blog posts, etc. It sounds like a fun way to get your feet wet and tackle a project, whether that’s a new project, or something you’ve been putting off.
I’m looking forward to it. Having a group and posting daily word counts is a great way to keep your momentum going. I’ll try to take a break from rabid novel writing from time to time to let you know how it’s going.
It’s not too late to join! Camp doesn’t begin until midnight tonight! The link is here: Camp
It’s funny how the creative process works sometimes. As I’ve mentioned before, I have trouble finishing one book until I figure out what story is next. I’ve wanted to try my hand at horror, and had a plot all pondered out. I’ll still write that book, but I was driving to the store the other day and another plot bunny hit me. A horror/farce tale that combines a theatre company and zombies. Inspired by the fun I had working on Stage One’s production of Night of the Living Dead, as well as The Zombie King himself, author and friend, Jack Wallen.
I’ve written farce before, and it’s big fun to do. There’s nothing that beats throwing ordinary people into ridiculous situations. I thought of this tale yesterday on my way to the store, pondered out all the major plot points last night, and the first chapter practically wrote itself today. I loved writing Wyrd House and Descending, but this is fun like I haven’t had since Ghost in the Park. I’m going to have a ball.
Teatime of the Living Dead is going to be hoot.
What I enjoyed about Witch for Hire was the storytelling. It’s an imaginative piece of speculative fiction with a decent plot at its backbone. The author has a nice touch with world-building, letting us get to know the realm of the tale, bit by bit, without any info dumping. The book begins well, right in the middle of the action, and gives the reader clues as they go along to help them understand both the world of the story and the thoughts and feelings of the main character.
What didn’t work for me was the writing itself. The author is a good story teller, but many times I felt that I was fighting writing style to get to the story. Commas are often used in place of conjunctions, which makes it a choppy read. Redundancies are frequent. For example, the following sentence: “Without a doubt I wasn’t suited to scary, life and death situations, where my life is in peril.” Redundancies occur in other ways. The MC often repeats the same reflections, or explains the same event in detail to multiple characters. Pace sometimes gets boggy when the main characters inner reflections and opinions on life steal too much focus from the tale. The MC sometimes seems preachy because of this. Dialogue tags become important, as most characters seem to have the same voice.
I enjoyed reading the book. While it’s a trope I have read before, the writer’s ideas and imagination bring it life. That said, I do not plan to read more in the series. I would like to give the author a few more books under their belt before reading more of their work.
What is awesome about Kindle and the self-publishing age is that there are tons of books out there that are being sold for 99 cents or even free of charge. Free books are fairly common. Authors who have put up the second book of a series often offer the first book free for a little while. Writers who are looking for more readers will do the same thing. Authors who now have several titles will offer older ones for free. It’s good marketing strategy. If one self publishes, and has to do the marketing oneself, then these are good ways to get readers interested. There’s even websites and blogs that will alert you to what free titles are available.
I thought that this would be wonderful. I have a ginormous reading habit and a limited budget for books. I am more than willing to pay for future books if I have enjoyed the free one. In fact, that gives me and my limited funds a sense of security. It’s safer to spend money on a book when you know that you enjoy the author’s writing already. Me, I’ll read almost anything.
There’s the rub. The key to that phrase is “almost.” My life is on a timer, and someday those seconds will run out. In a world full of amazing tales, I don’t have time for bad books.
I have looked at many free books and I’m sure that I’ll download one eventually. So far, I haven’t. I’ll tell you two reasons why.
1. Your description sucks.
It’s the same as query letters. It doesn’t matter if your book is the most awesome and well written tale in the cosmos. If your description is bad, I’m not reading it. Not even for free.
Here’s some examples of what I mean. No titles or author names—I’m not trying to shame anyone or put them off writing. For heaven’s sake, if you see your description here, don’t freak out. Work on making it better.
New York. 2120. American has been decimated, wiped out from the second Civil War.
(Edit due to error pointed out by alert reader. Thanks alert reader!) I had originally had some snarky umbrage here about the use of the word “decimate.” This is a word I automatically think of the meaning as “reduced by ten percent.” It also has a common usage that basically means the same as “wiped out,” so now I’m just annoyed by the redundancy. The whole first bit of this description turns me off. A city, a place, a badly-worded event that is backstory. It leaves me wondering what this book is about and why I would read it in the first place. It could be brilliant, but I’ll never know because I’m not wasting my time on reading one more word of this description.
Evil erupts. Four are called. The universe awaits.
Oooooh, short mysterious sentences! How original! Stop trying to be coy and tell me what the book is about. Nope, too late, you’ve already lost me.
Once soulmates, the witch and warlock covens of the California coast have been estranged for a century.
I’m reading this one over my dead body. One, “soul mates” is two words. Merriam-Webster says it’s been that way since the phrase came to be in 1822. Two: There are exactly 1,235,692,876.5 books about witches and covens out there at the moment. If you aren’t going to tell me in the first line why yours is different, then my eyes are going to glaze over and I’ll move on to the next offering. Bonus Three: Don’t start with backstory.
It’s the summer of 1976 and Vince Moody is a quiet and unassuming projectionist at the run-down Empire cinema in the small town of Langbridge in the middle of the Somerset Levels.
Oh my fucking wombats. How many details can you stuff into an opening sentence? Well, all of them if you are Dickens. Free book writer–you are not Dickens. Stop using your synopsis for a description. I don’t need to know the MC’s entire life story in your opening sentence. I don’t need to know that he lives in Langbridge or where that city is. You should be showing me why I want to read about your MC, but I already hate him. I hate Vince because he made me read that stupid sentence.
Free book writers- for wombat’s sake, please take the time to learn to write a good and effective description. This is what sells the book. Don’t make me want to jab out my own eyes with a pointed stick rather than read your book!
2. Your writing sucks.
That’s harsh. I know it is. The self-publishing world has some wonderful and well written stories in it. That is, if you can find them through the oceans of crap.
The e-book world has this wonderful feature that lets you read the first few pages of a book. If I like the description, the first few pages are what I look at next. The first few pages of all the free books I have looked at so far have been bad. Very bad.
I think that the problem is this. Anyone can self-publish these days. So they do. In most cases, the first book you write, and the second, and the third, aren’t going to be trade published. Why should they? Do you want to pay for a haircut from someone who is cutting hair for the first time? It takes time to develop a good writing style and well-crafted tales. It takes practice to write a novel worth reading, even for free. However, with the ease of self-publishing, aspiring writers are putting their first work out there in the public eye right away.
This practice isn’t helping anyone. It’s not helping the readers, because they are tired of slogging through poorly written work to try to find the diamond in the rough. It hurts green writers because they can’t help but get discouraged when the sales don’t come rolling in. I imagine that many give up writing altogether, though they should not. No matter how clever one is, it takes practice to craft a good novel. Take that time now, before you publish. If you don’t, and put your work out for the world to see and judge, you might be shooting yourself in the foot. If I hate your first book, published before it’s time, why should I give you another chance when you write your fifth book? Even if it is the best novel in the whole history of the whole history, it’s too late. I’ve already been disappointed in your writing before, and I won’t be willing to spend my limited book buying funds on you again. Learn to write with some sense of style and grace. Then, and only then, publish your work.
I finished the book. It’s had several rereads and rewrites to polish it up. Two lovely beta readers have had their eyes on it, beat it with a comma stick, and found some typos. The query is written and polished. You’d think my little book was ready to fly out into the world, wouldn’t you?
It is now, but it wasn’t yesterday. I always leave my most despised task for last. Overused words. We all have words and phrases that we rely on a little too much. There are websites and articles that point out common and lazy words to avoid. However, every writer has words that they overuse that are specific to them.
For example, from a website of weak words to be avoided: stuff. Not a word I use much. My book is 63k. In all of that, I’ve used the word “stuff” 7 times, with one use being “stuffy.” They occur in dialog. 7 out of 63,000. Not a problem. Many of the words I find on these advice websites no longer apply to my writing.
In fact, I don’t worry much about anything that appears less than 100 times in a novel this length, unless it is a truly unimaginative word such as “very.” How many “verys” do I have? 21, not bad at all.
So, how does a writer find those problem words that are specific to their particular work? I like the word cloud method. There are programs online that make a picture out of common words in writing. There are many free programs online to choose from. I’m fond of Word It Out. Not only will it accept a novel worth of words, but it has options to change colors and size gradients so that it’s easier to see the problem areas. Words that are used most often appear bigger in a word cloud. You are likely to see main character names and the word “said” in giant letters, and other words common to the document in smaller letters, depending on frequency of use. Words used sparingly won’t show up in the picture at all.
I plug my shiny new novel into Word It Out, use the search feature on my Word document to look up words that appear in large letters, and what do I find?
120 uses of the word “still.” Mostly when what I wanted was “continued” or “remained.” I went through the book document by navigating with Word’s find feature (such a godsend!), and knocked that down to 46.
229 uses of the word “like.” WTF? Hedge pigs on a pogo stick, what was I thinking? Yes, it’s a contemporary piece with lots-o-dialogue, but honestly! “Like” was most often misused when what I wanted was “as if,” “such as,” or “as.” Yes, it’s a common word, and it will show up in dialog and analogies, but it’s often a vague and boring choice. I trimmed usage down to 96.
Speaking of vague words, “Things” wasn’t much of a problem at 56 times used, but it is a wishy-washy word, so I trimmed it to 25 times.
It’s an ongoing battle. An old overused word of mine reared its ugly head. I used to have this one licked, but the characters in my current novel wanted to keep saying it. “Just.” “Just” reared its boring head 148 times, so I lobbed it off to 37. I often used it when what I wanted was “only,” “barely,” and “scarcely,” and times when it wasn’t needed at all. Kill “just” with fire.
A new problem word arose, and I blame it on writing reports for a job I had working with at-risk kids. In these reports, we were not allowed to say anything like “Bob was sad,” because we didn’t know it, we were only observers. So we had to write things such as “Bob seemed sad.” Seemed. Unless one is a lawyer or an eye witness in a court of law, seemed is a very boring word choice. My usage was under 100 times, but I axed quite a bit of them for being too uninteresting to live. If it wasn’t for my word cloud, I wouldn’t have known “seemed” was a problem.
“But won’t my beta readers notice this and alert me?” you seem to ask. No, not likely. Not if your writing is smooth and you haven’t used the same word too many times in the same segment. Even an editor or agent might not catch it. However, if you find these uninspiring word choices and substitute words that are more engaging, that agent or editor might go from thinking your book is all right to thinking it is something worth backing. It’s these small choices that make a book more interesting to read. “Scarcely” is a far more specific choice than “just,” which is a catch-all word with a variety of meanings. Stronger word choices make your writing interesting and your meaning clear.
That last sentence was almost “more interesting and your meaning more clear.”
“More.” Used 134 times in my book. Cut down to 63. Often used in place of “again,” “most,” or using a specific amount or an amount word such as “few” or “brighter.” So many times not needed at all.
I learn. I use my word cloud, I search my document, and I learn. I automatically cut the “mores” from that sentence above.
Was it worth the entire day I spent doing this yesterday? Was it worth the mind-numbingly repetitive task, and all the times I yelled at my screen “what was I thinking?”
Oh, yes. It absolutely was. My book is better for it, and I myself know what problem words I need to watch out for in my next project. It was worth every second and every single shout.
There’s two “everys” there, but I’ll let them stand for emphasis. Deciding when repetition of a word is useful or not is all part of the job.
The new book, Descending, has returned from the lovely beta readers and been corrected. They didn’t find a lot of errors, and that makes me happy. With every book I write, my writing gets cleaner. I still require someone to beat it with a comma stick, but even my comma use is improving.
The query has been put to bat at Absolute Write, and some wonderful folks helped me whip it into shape. My query writing has greatly improved since I’ve been active there, but there is no substitute for getting impartial eyes on the query. I’m so close to the story, it’s impossible for me to see what’s clear and what isn’t. So the query went from decent to greatly improved in the space of a few days. It was frustrating, as query letter writing always is, but it’s very rewarding to see the query tighten up and take shape.
Now, it’s off to a word cloud program to check for word overuse, then a little time for formatting. I should be able to send it off on a test run tonight! :)
Last night, I finished my third novel, Descending. Huzzah! Descending is a shorter (62k) romance that I intend to send straight out to a publisher. Not one of the big 5, but a smaller publisher with a good reputation. Hopefully they’ll like it. It’s a romance about a group of theatre people that get crashed in the mountains. The book is off to the beta. The query is getting ripped apart by the awesome Query Letter Hell squirrels at Absolute Write even as we speak. It’s nice to have something ready to wing its way out into the world again.
So why am I going straight to a publisher this time? All part of the plan! Like most new authors, I’m having trouble getting an agent. The short stories I’ve had published are not going to cut it. I need to get a novel or two published, I think, before I try to get an agent again. With that in mind, book two, Wyrd House, has been sent off to Harlequin Nocturne, and I’m planning on sending Descending to Samhain. That’s where I’ve started, though I plan to shop them other places as well.
Book one: supernatural mystery. Book two: paranormal romance. Book three: adventure romance.
“So what’s book four going to be?” you seem to ask. Horror. I’ve got the plot all mapped out, and I’m spreading my wings and travelling to horror land. Not my usual bailiwick, but I’ve certainly read a lot of it. I need a break from romance land. Can’t get much further away from romance than horror.
I doubt that my romance betas will be onboard for this one. If anyone wants to beta read a horror story, let me know!
You can find a sneak peek of Descending under the “My Writing” tab under the top banner.
I cut my writing teeth on fanfic. Fanfic has its place and its purpose in the universe. Honestly, haven’t you ever been so inspired by a writer’s world, or character, or plot, that you wished it would never end? In fanfic, it never ends. Fanfic is meant as compliment to an author. “You took me to a place I wasn’t ready to leave, so I didn’t.”
There is also fanfic that’s been published. There are some writers and publishers that have opened their worlds to fanfic writers to play with. There’s a whole section on Amazon for these stories. The key idea being, that the writers have been given permission from the owners of those literary worlds.
And why not? Published fanfic has been with us for ages. What do you think all of those Star Trek novels were? Ditto for Star Wars, Forgotten Realms, etc. The list goes on and on. I myself have a two-volume set of published Buffy the Vampire Slayer short stories by various authors. Fanfic isn’t new. I imagine that when Homer wrote The Odyssey some other writer was so taken with it that they wrote a story about it.
There’s another way to publish fanfiction. Re-write it to take out everything that ties it to the book it was written about. That’s honest enough. After all, the plot belongs to the writer, not the original creator. Take out anything you have borrowed from Twilight, for example, and re-write it as 50 Shades of Grey. Perfectly legal.
The thing is, there are legal rules about publishing fanfic. The owners of the art can open up the world of the story, or each individual story must be approved by the owners of the art. That’s how we got those Star Trek novels. They didn’t accept just any story; a writer’s story had to be approved for publication.
Then we have the idea of parody. You’ve seen parody movies, I’m sure. Airplane was a parody of disaster movies. You know what it didn’t do? Take a specific airport disaster movie, and steal its plot and characters. That’s plagiarism.
Fanfic websites, for the most part, survive legal matters for two reasons that are intimately attached. They are considered parody, and the writer is making no profit from the work of another writer. They are available for free, so the writer makes no money from someone else’s work. The writers also give credit where credit is due. They say flat out that the characters, world, etc belongs to someone else, and they don’t try to pass those things off as their own. Even for free, you can’t just take someone else’s words and use them yourself.
And then there’s this:
I read an excerpt from this in the sneak peek view. It’s not parody. It’s no Airplane, making fun of a genre. It’s a writer that has stolen someone else’s characters and world, and is profiting by doing that. That’s not parody, that’s theft. It’s also not very good, but that’s beside the point.
WTF Amazon? What the fuck were you thinking? Just slapping the word “parody” on a cover does not protect one from plagiarism charges. This isn’t Pride and Prejudice and Zombies, where someone has taken a story in the public domain and had some fun with it. This is theft of copyrighted material. The slight tongue-in-cheek writing style of the above example does not negate the theft of characters and world.
There are watchdogs that guard the gates. There are people all over the art world who notice when someone’s art is stolen and used without permission. Use that famous picture on your website, you might get a cease and desist letter. Use someone else’s words, same result. Unfortunately, Amazon does not seem very interested in receiving warnings that they are selling something that has been plagiarized. They only accept such statements from the owner of the content. That is a pretty weak way to do this. The watchdogs are necessary. It’s a big, big, world out there, and no one artist can keep an eye on the whole thing to see if someone steals their work. Bad form, Amazon. From a group that has big blanket rules that, for example, reject any self-published book with the word “virgin” on the title just in case it might have to do with underage sex, I expected better. At this rate, I feel like I am more likely to get a cease and desist letter for the pic I posted of that cover before the art thief gets one.
Do me and the art world a favor. Don’t pay money for stolen art. Don’t be fooled just because someone slaps the word “parody” on the cover. Don’t reward the thief.
I bought this book today to read on my brand new Kindle. (Happy birthday to me, and thanks Mom!)
It’s a fun read. I enjoy mystery/thriller, and this falls on the mystery side of that coin.
What works for me in this book is writing style. The writing is engaging and draws you in.
What didn’t work for me in this book was character development. Characters are fairly one dimensional and not one of the characters are likable.
Early in the book there is a touch of head hopping between POV of the two main characters, which jarred me at a couple of moments, leaving me unsure of who’s head I was in for a second. Soon into the book, this issue is resolved and it didn’t catch me off guard again.
I would certainly recommend it as a fun read to sit with a cup of tea on a rainy Saturday afternoon.
What I am most looking forward to is more from this author after they get a few more books under their belt. I’m expecting very good things from Mr. Therme in the future. I’m looking forward to it.
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